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Deathly Dreaming by ~lost-and-alone:iconlost-and-alone:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Experimental




Whisper softly
Words that hang you
Strangle you with your defiant weeping
Making sence of all their wrongs
Quiet while your mind is seeking

Screaming loudly
Words to seethe through
Burning with your constant dreaming
Hoping for the fateful day
Not to come for rightful treating

Accent greatly
Words remembered
Haunting you for longly hating
Thoughts you keep for much to long
Keeping safe is so degrading

Smile surely
Words don\'t show through
Talking won\'t show your mindless weaving
Escaping not all of their ranting
Daggers peirce and blood is seeping

Fading slowly
Words are nothing
Not in this world of relentless drowning
Breathing keeps reality coming
Maybe breathless is only what I\'m wishing
©2003-2010 ~lost-and-alone
:iconlost-and-alone:

Author's Comments

I just wrote this....

...dunno how it acquired a flow, but somehow it did

....Yippee?

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:iconfaiden:
~faiden May 9, 2003, 9:53:40 PM
WOW! HOLY COW! GREAT JOB! KICK ASS...

Did I miss anything? Either way I like!

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I had a dream. But no one cared to listen.
:iconsmoanwnet:
~smoanwnet May 9, 2003, 9:55:12 PM
pretty cool, pretty scare, pretty interesting, pretty nice

pretty good

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Throwing his cloak aside, he jumped to his feet and came to Jesus.
:iconnonilufa:
~nonilufa May 9, 2003, 9:57:07 PM
That's an amazing picture to go along with your amazing pome, Great job! *FAVS*

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You are drowning in a sea of wrong, as I go by in my ship of right
:bump:
:iconlost-and-alone:
~lost-and-alone May 9, 2003, 9:58:18 PM
Wow

It's pretty and kick-ass

Can my confidence becoming any better?

j/k

Thanks ^.^

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Me? No! OF COURSE I'm not lost... I'm just... well.. I'm just hiding from the real world... shh... don't tell them I'm here..

:icon dark-writing:
:icontravian-:
~travian- May 10, 2003, 8:05:54 PM
Nice poem...It should be cattagoried as dark (no offence) and it was verry nice...Simular to me the last group of lines were. We all hide from the world at one point...I hide alot though. I'm niave. Well love the poem. gonna fav it. I dont fav many poems. I like dark poems alot. And If you drew the pic be an artist also...I'm a phoyographer with few poems.

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It's all fun and games till someone gets hurt, then it is hillarious. ----> :fork: :lmao:
:iconryiena:
~Ryiena Sep 27, 2003, 1:53:05 PM
It's nicely written. Your poem is one of the first I've read here and I really like it. Keep up the excellent work! ^_^
:iconlost-and-alone:
~lost-and-alone Oct 7, 2003, 12:16:41 PM
Thank you Very much ^.^

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--Well, turned out I actually was lost. But guess what? Then I remembered that this one time....

...at band camp...
:iconblue-vanilla:
~blue-vanilla Dec 14, 2003, 10:04:42 PM
Waaaai! What a beautiful poem! I love the last line the most!
:iconlost-and-alone:
~lost-and-alone Dec 15, 2003, 3:53:21 PM
That figures, that was the line I had the most trouble with!

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--Well, turned out I actually was lost. But guess what? Then I remembered that this one time....

...at band camp...
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